On a school trip to Germany, Todd visits the concentration camp at Dachau and discovers his grandfather’s secret and the evil he imprisoned there over 60 years ago.
I think it turned out pretty good. It's not perfect, but in 3 days, it isn't really supposed to be. The top 5 screenplays out of 25 move on to the next round, so I think I have a pretty good shot. Suzi didn't think it was scary enough or horrific enough, but I do think that if you translated it to film that it would have plenty of those things.
I like the setting because so much emotion and history are automatically associated with Dachau. I didn't have to take room to add that in. I also used some pretty good visual imagery like the a shaved head with a swastika tattoo and the gas chamber with a demonic smoke coming through the vents. I thought that I did a good job of having my story have a life before and after the screenplay starts.
I could have done better with the ending. It feels a little rushed, but I ran out of room and time. I liked my dialog, but I wish I had had more room to develop my protagonist a little more. I wanted to go into the other characters more, but again, space was limited. I think I tagged the important things well and naturally and I hope the payoff works.
So now I play the waiting game yet again and hope that my screenplay is ranked in the top 5 by the judges. I am happy with my submission and will be good no matter what happens.
